.Oh! William! What's Occurring?.

just a couple of final images that are still sort of works-in-progress from the book "Oh William!" i'm working on for the MacMillan childrens book brief. im very aware that my book won't be put forward for submission, but i just want something to hand in to try and bolster my marks for this year. ideally someone will come and tell me what im doing wrong, as these images look so bloody gammy, but maybe ill have a brainwave...